In the student essay, the what was the main claim of the p.o.r. being analyzed?
What were the student essay's strengths? What weak points could have been improved upon?
The main claim is how oil prices can lead to suicide. The strengths are the vocabulary and background information in the first paragraph. Some weak points are it was to square, the structure was to point by point and a A would have more transitions between them.
The main claim of the p.o.r was that the gas prices were unbelievably high causing financial suicide of peoples wallets. The strengths were giving the back round information of what the t-shirt was unable to give about.
The essay was really conveying. It had a lot of detail, and you knew where exactly to go. The rhetoric that he choose was well thought through, and the writer knew a lot f background on that topic. The main topic was about gas prices going up.
The essay was hard to read but they analyzed the piece of rhetoric. The p.o.r being analyzed was of a man being choked but the gas prices and capitalism. Some strengths the essay has is explaining the logos behind the claim. Its spelling was pretty good. It identified the weakness of the p.o.r. as its authority.
The main piece of rhetoric was a t-shirt that had something to do with high gas prices. The strengths were analyzing and explaining the implied claims. The weaknesses was the organization of the essay.
The main claim of the p.o.r. being analyzed is that social/economic situations such as the raising of oil prices cause an increase in suicide rates. The student's strengths in this essay are their vocab. They use Logos, Pathos, and Ethos. They use clear descriptive writing and make sure to detail the multiple claims and the medium. The weak points that could have been improved upon are that the focus of the essay should be more on the oil prices being raised and less emphasis on suicide. Although they are correlated, the piece of rhetoric is specifically targeting the oil prices.
The essay was strong in points of organization and structure. It clearly identified the audiences and claims (stated and implied) as well gave an introduction. The introduction however was a little weak since it didn't exactly catch a readers attention by starting off that everyone over the age of 16 drives a car. The essay was strong in terms of explaining its implied claims such as the symbolism of the color green for environmentalism and greed/money, but the essay did ramble and pose a rather casual instead of professional tone.
In the student essay the main claim of the piece of rhetoric was that gas was making people "suicidal" or killing people. The student detailed everything well and described the use of medium down to the T and how the source was lacked credibility. However, the claim was weak and he failed to see below the surface. The paragraphs were too focused on how gas was making people "suicidal" which was a major fallacy.
The main clam of the p.o.r being analyzed was that gas prices were getting too high that it is making people want to commit suicide and the prices are slowly killing people. The student used great choice of words and made the essay sound very intelligent. They also described the piece of rhetoric well. I felt that the claim might have been far fetched. Without seeing a visual of the actual medium, I can't make any different or similar claims.
The student's main claim being analyzed was that the increase in gas prices causes suicide. His strengths were that he did a good job finding some implied claims that supported the argument, but lacked in showing the significance of those claims and why they're important.
In this essay , the main claim of the rhetoric was increase in gas prices had caused many conflicts in population. Student's strengths were the structures of sentences and a strong pathos. The emotional appeal to this claim was strong and people who have or drive a car could easily relate.
The claim was that the t-shirt was trying to say that environment and gas prices cause suicide because the price was too high. The student had strong logos and data about the shirt. The student also went into detail of every aspect of the shirt. The students transitioning was pretty bad.
The main point was stating that the increasing gas prices will lead oneself to commit suicide physically or have emotional impact attached with it. The essay was strong in diction and the ways of making sure the claim was thoroughly understood. Potential weaknesses were the idea that some of the sentences could have been made into one, unless the author was intending for potentially awkward parallelism, there was also some repetition.
The student's main claim for the piece of rhetoric was that the rising gas prices directly influence suicides. The student's essay's strengths included a lot of substance and different structured sentences. However, the spacing between the paragraphs was lacking, which was intimidating towards the reader.
The Piece of Rhetoric being analyzed were the gas prices that made it difficult for people to live a normal life being affected by the prices due to where it comes from. His strengths were that he had a lot of support towards Rhetoric analysis and made sure his grammar tied in with the topic he was focusing on.
P.O.R. (piece of rhetoric) the weak point that the student made was the transitioning in which the word "this" became repetitive. However, the student did a good job analyzing the the t-shirt, encompassing societal thoughts on gas prices.
The main claim is how oil prices can lead to suicide. The strengths are the vocabulary and background information in the first paragraph. Some weak points are it was to square, the structure was to point by point and a A would have more transitions between them.
ReplyDeleteThe main claim of the p.o.r was that the gas prices were unbelievably high causing financial suicide of peoples wallets. The strengths were giving the back round information of what the t-shirt was unable to give about.
ReplyDeleteThe essay was really conveying. It had a lot of detail, and you knew where exactly to go. The rhetoric that he choose was well thought through, and the writer knew a lot f background on that topic. The main topic was about gas prices going up.
ReplyDeleteThe essay was hard to read but they analyzed the piece of rhetoric. The p.o.r being analyzed was of a man being choked but the gas prices and capitalism. Some strengths the essay has is explaining the logos behind the claim. Its spelling was pretty good. It identified the weakness of the p.o.r. as its authority.
ReplyDeleteThe main piece of rhetoric was a t-shirt that had something to do with high gas prices. The strengths were analyzing and explaining the implied claims. The weaknesses was the organization of the essay.
ReplyDeleteThe main claim of the p.o.r. being analyzed is that social/economic situations such as the raising of oil prices cause an increase in suicide rates. The student's strengths in this essay are their vocab. They use Logos, Pathos, and Ethos. They use clear descriptive writing and make sure to detail the multiple claims and the medium. The weak points that could have been improved upon are that the focus of the essay should be more on the oil prices being raised and less emphasis on suicide. Although they are correlated, the piece of rhetoric is specifically targeting the oil prices.
ReplyDeleteThe essay was strong in points of organization and structure. It clearly identified the audiences and claims (stated and implied) as well gave an introduction. The introduction however was a little weak since it didn't exactly catch a readers attention by starting off that everyone over the age of 16 drives a car.
ReplyDeleteThe essay was strong in terms of explaining its implied claims such as the symbolism of the color green for environmentalism and greed/money, but the essay did ramble and pose a rather casual instead of professional tone.
In the student essay the main claim of the piece of rhetoric was that gas was making people "suicidal" or killing people. The student detailed everything well and described the use of medium down to the T and how the source was lacked credibility. However, the claim was weak and he failed to see below the surface. The paragraphs were too focused on how gas was making people "suicidal" which was a major fallacy.
ReplyDeleteThe main clam of the p.o.r being analyzed was that gas prices were getting too high that it is making people want to commit suicide and the prices are slowly killing people. The student used great choice of words and made the essay sound very intelligent. They also described the piece of rhetoric well. I felt that the claim might have been far fetched. Without seeing a visual of the actual medium, I can't make any different or similar claims.
ReplyDeleteThe student's main claim being analyzed was that the increase in gas prices causes suicide. His strengths were that he did a good job finding some implied claims that supported the argument, but lacked in showing the significance of those claims and why they're important.
ReplyDeleteIn this essay , the main claim of the rhetoric was increase in gas prices had caused many conflicts in population. Student's strengths were the structures of sentences and a strong pathos. The emotional appeal to this claim was strong and people who have or drive a car could easily relate.
ReplyDeleteThe claim was that the t-shirt was trying to say that environment and gas prices cause suicide because the price was too high. The student had strong logos and data about the shirt. The student also went into detail of every aspect of the shirt. The students transitioning was pretty bad.
ReplyDeleteThe main point was stating that the increasing gas prices will lead oneself to commit suicide physically or have emotional impact attached with it. The essay was strong in diction and the ways of making sure the claim was thoroughly understood. Potential weaknesses were the idea that some of the sentences could have been made into one, unless the author was intending for potentially awkward parallelism, there was also some repetition.
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ReplyDeleteThe student's main claim for the piece of rhetoric was that the rising gas prices directly influence suicides. The student's essay's strengths included a lot of substance and different structured sentences. However, the spacing between the paragraphs was lacking, which was intimidating towards the reader.
ReplyDeleteThe Piece of Rhetoric being analyzed were the gas prices that made it difficult for people to live a normal life being affected by the prices due to where it comes from. His strengths were that he had a lot of support towards Rhetoric analysis and made sure his grammar tied in with the topic he was focusing on.
ReplyDeleteP.O.R. (piece of rhetoric) the weak point that the student made was the transitioning in which the word "this" became repetitive. However, the student did a good job analyzing the the t-shirt, encompassing societal thoughts on gas prices.
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