I'd like you to create your own sentences based on the following sentence structures: try a sentence with an appositive; one that uses a participle or two (it could start the sentence as in this example, or go anywhere else in the sentence you like); and then a sentence with an absolute and a particple or an appositive (the last example starts with a participle and finishes with an absolute).
Teenagers— those young, wild rebels— often wear clothes their parents dislike.
Partying with friends and studying long hours, I soon realized college life would be a series of shocks.
Wearing his superman outfit, Sean rushed outside with his new double-barreled water gun, finger pulling mercilessly on the trigger.
Once you've posted your three sentences, you should go back to the portfolio paper you're working on-- keep these structures in mind (they can help you start sentences when you're stumped, or even combine sentences that seem unnecessary).
Mr. Whittington-the best teacher ever-roasted me until I cried.
ReplyDeleteGetting roasted by Mr. Whittington, I needed ice for the several burns.
Feeling the burns of Mr. Whittington's flaming comments, I- a struggling victim- ran away from the savage roast.
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Deleteget it right
DeleteStop guys, this hurts my heart.
DeleteFresh insults spraying, I- a struggling victim- ran away from the savage roast, feeling the burns of Mr. Whittington's flaming comments.
DeleteGetting roasted by Mr. Whittington, I needed ice for the severe burns.
DeleteThere you go Dax and Alice...this has been a fun ride.
You didn't use the dash you used the hyphen
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DeleteJan-his whole heart- held onto him.
DeleteFilling with tears, his eyes dropped to the ground unable to glance at his family.
His ears stinging, he grasped with his cracked hands-overused tools- his head, throbbing in pain.
chill
DeleteThe dictator—short and stout—love basketball.
ReplyDeleteLooking back at the scene, it made me feel noxious.
It wasn’t long until the professor, my former coach, made it to the game.
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ReplyDeletePuppies— flurry snowballs, filled with joy — have endless energy.
Hanging out late with my friend, it was evident that the next day would be tough.
Looking for birds, Marlyn tip-toed across the field with binoculars, eyes peering out the lens.
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DeleteCrying—salty tears, red eyes—I pointed at my throat.
DeleteThe emergency service line asked to speak to me, I started making feeble attempts to speak to the lady.
My mom was frightened, waking my dad up, calming me down.
The emergency service line asked to speak to me, making feeble attempts to speak to the lady.
DeleteDucks--those stinky, annoying birds-- were in the middle of the street.
ReplyDeleteFighting with my neighbors, I realized that I was incorrect.
Eating Chipotle, in the corner by herself, she dropped her water.
ILOVECHIPOTLE
DeleteIs this grammatically correct?
DeleteIs that you in the sentence?
DeleteIt was a classic alarm clock-- its bold red numbers and matte black border.
DeleteStraightening my back, my lips twitch at the thought of the bright light hitting my eyes as soon as I walk out the room.
Turning to see what time it was, four-thirty a.m., I had to rush my morning schedule.
Doctors—those ones with perfect hair and invisible wrinkles— are the reason why I failed medical school.
ReplyDeletePlanting my feet on the ground and keeping my chin up, I fought the gravity of the audience’s stares and judgements.
Tugging at my gloves, I reached for the scalpel and made the first incision, realizing then that I had the wrong body.
"You look...great." --flashbacks of torn up sneakers and oversized hoodies were stuck in my mind-- "I've never seen you in a suit before, oh my."
Deletethe flashing image of sitting on his bedside, a long midnight talk about his rehabilitation plan.
the imitation of an onlooker luring a rare animal closer, he slowly raised a hand as if to touch my cheek, but recoiled it just as quickly as it had been initiated.
A loud and obnoxious student-Matthew- was hit by Mr.Whitington with an eraser.
ReplyDeleteFailing 4 classes out of my 5, Matthew realized he wasn't giving my best effort and should have never failed.
While all of us were helping at the car wash, Matthew was enjoying his time at the Sand dunes.
Grandma— sweet and loving—made warm oatmeal cookies for everyone.
ReplyDeletePlaying in the heat and getting a new bruise every day, I realized that softball was going to be a long stressful journey.
Waiting for the bus, Jon staring blankly at his phone, his fingers rapidly tapping playing the games.
And even when the diagnosis is correct, they say, many children who are taking medication for ADHD could do as well or better with alternative treatments--dietary and behavioral therapies--that have fewer side effects.
DeleteFeeling the guilt of medicating their kids, the parents soon realized that they need to do what is best for their kids and no one else.
As other critiques talked, parents wondered what to do, they talked about all the other solutions to the problems.
Pancakes-- tasty an American crape-- is enjoyed by many people.
ReplyDeleteWalking along the hall, Alice came to conclusion that she forgot to turn in her math home work.
Looking around, wandering in the streets, Tom began to cry.
-Joshua Lucero
ReplyDeleteThe lion-- a wild and fierce beast-- can roar loud enough to be heard from three miles away.
Working for five hours washing cars, I saw my friends who were wore out from the long day in the sun.
The Golden Potato and chicken nuggets
The main claim of the cartoon is that the target audience--of fat or smoking or alcoholic beverage drinking Americans--focuses on a less dangerous topic than what affects them in their present conditions such as diabetes or heart disease.
DeleteWorking Americans focusing their fear and efforts on Ebola virus, forgetting the problems at home, dealing with obesity, smoking and alcoholism.
Staggering numbers distract the target audience just the same way the media would distract a viewer with headlines on Ebola instead of the amount of deaths in the last year caused by obesity.
Running away from the crime scene, the main tried to escape the police.
ReplyDeleteFlashing lights, Blaring sirens, he knew things were over.
"Escaped criminal, you have nowhere to run!" shouted the police.
Legs slowing, he began to give up the chase.
Slowly walking and staring towards the Grand Canyon Swing, I noticed a small child being tucked in a yellow arm.
ReplyDeleteSavannah -easily to convince- rode the iron mountain tramway.
ReplyDeleteFootball players— tough, hard-hitting opponents— often go for the legs when they tackle.
Laughing with friends while playing games, I realized that I forgot the cookies in the oven.
Victoria— a tall, fair skinned girl with short black hair— was always excited to try new things and often dragged me into them.
DeleteElijah— a husky, soft-spoken boy— wasn’t as adventurous as Victoria.
Examining the patient, there were bruises, scratches and burned.
ReplyDeleteFeeling defeated-- the failure-- went to sleep
Walking slowly-- a turtle-- sped up to win the race, but got eaten by the wolf down the trail.
Ranging from hundreds of millions of dollars per person-- Hospital expenses could be saved by United Healthcare.
DeleteEnrolling "in a new health plan on or after September 23, 2010..."
Matthew, feeling depressed, threw himself off the building.
ReplyDeleteMatthew- loud, obnoxious, midget- should be knocked out.
Calmly listening to Mr.Whitington's lecture, Matthew wouldn't stop talking with Alice or Kausila.
The college graduates--stressed individuals-- will feel a mixture of emotions towards changing tuition cost.
ReplyDeleteFearing the load of debt, some people avoid taking out loans, but others don't have any alternative.
Crying furiously, I forgot how hungry I was.
Teenagers— those young, wild rebels— often wear clothes their parents dislike.
ReplyDeletePartying with friends and studying long hours, I soon realized college life would be a series of shocks.
Wearing his superman outfit, Sean rushed outside with his new double-barreled water gun, finger pulling mercilessly on the trigger.
Own sentences:
Elderly— those old, obnoxious people--- often make a big deal if they do not get a senior discount.
Working with irresponsible people and working long hours, I soon realized that having a job is going to teach me life long lessons.
Wearing her scrubs, she ran through the emergency doors with her gloves on, heart beating heavily through her chest.
IB Students- dedicated, caring- students who believe there is more to education than subjects in school.
DeleteHaving to pay a lot of money for exam fees-- I realized that I wasn't going to be able to save for college.
Wearing her Air Max's, she ran across the basketball court, she imagined a Chinese boy.